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Kris Pavek's avatar

Frequently, I will complete a book and my unspoken review is, “I could have written this story in one page”.

I don't think about my writing style. It's been described by others as, “vivid and concise”.

I've been asked to add more details. I balk.

It seems superfluous to me.

I love your shortest version of the poem.

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Emily Kaminsky's avatar

Thank you! I wrote a 50,000+ word story a few years ago for national novel writing month challenge. I got so into it! Reminds me that often (always?) we are writing for ourselves. In my case, my effluvescence might have turned off a reader but as a writer I could have written (and still might) 50k more! I only dropped it because writing 3 hours a night after everything else burnt me out.

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Kris Pavek's avatar

I have the greatest admiration for any woman that can write while her children still live at home.

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Kathryn Vercillo's avatar

Really inspiring to see your whittling down process. The shape emerges like when carving a sculpture.

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Emily Kaminsky's avatar

Thank you Kathryn for dropping by, reading and commenting! I also find it interesting to sometimes pick up the shavings/cast-offs and use those as prompts to start a new piece. Reminding myself now to try this with this poem as there were some things I put down or aside but still love and could perhaps spin into the core of a new poem. Hope all is well with you. XO

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Kathryn Vercillo's avatar

I was just reading an article about an artist who saves every scrap of everything she can to eventually put into some piece, even if it's just a piece that's a "sketch" or playtime. I don't want to go that extent with physical items but I do like this idea that none of it is ever fully thrown away!

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Amy Cowen's avatar

I enjoyed seeing all three versions and reading about your current distillation practice. Unfortunately, I greatly understand the existential crisis and the ongoing search for meaning. Keep writing through....

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Emily Kaminsky's avatar

Thank you Amy! Knowing I'm not alone certainly helps. It's the reason I not only write but post (a la Amy Cowen 😉).

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Jason O'Toole's avatar

I like the long version as it has some breathing room to take in each short stanza. I misread one line as "souls tingle."

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Emily Kaminsky's avatar

Thank you for the read and the feedback. Breathing room. Aha. And yes, misread success! Soles, souls, same difference in poetryland.

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